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Band 3

Today different types of robots are being developed which can serve as companions and workers to help at work and at home. Is this a positive or negative development?

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this
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the
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 present,
people
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 developed
robots
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 so far that they become a part of human life. Some
people
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start
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have started
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 using
robots
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 as companions and workers to help at
work
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 and at home. I believe that
this
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 is a positive development.
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 with, robotic use helps to do routine
work
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 and
save
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saves
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your
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apply
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time and energy.
Such
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routine
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routines
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 as cleaning, cooking at home and analyzing some papers at
work
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 can be done by
robots
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.
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, I have
robotic
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a robotic
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 vacuum cleaner. It
cleaning
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cleans
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 my room when I am not at home and
save
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saves
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 a lot of time. On
other
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the other
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 hand, these types of
robots
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 could be the cause of human laziness.
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 routine as aforementioned helps
people
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 to discipline themselves. It is
very
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a very
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 important part of
person
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the person
a person
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 and if
people
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 stop
to do
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doing
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this
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 routine, they won't be
possible
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able
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 to do hard
work
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. In conclusion, it is
really
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a really
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 good idea to use
robots
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 in daily life, but you always should remember that overuse of
robots
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 can lead to bad consequences.

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coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly states your opinion and the conclusion summarizes it well.
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You have identified both positive and negative aspects, showing a balanced perspective.
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Your essay addresses the question directly and provides a complete response.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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