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Some high schools require all students to wear uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school politics de you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Wearing
of
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apply
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uniforms
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are
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is
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 a prerequisite
to
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for
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 their students
for
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in
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 some high
schools
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.
On the other hand
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,
there
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their
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 other
schools
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allows
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allow
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student
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the student
a student
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 to choose and
to
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apply
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wear appropriate clothes in attending their class. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 wearing of prescribe uniform is better than those who
doesn't
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don't
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.
School
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uniforms
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is
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are
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 an important image of
a
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the
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school
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in that
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that
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which
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 they are enrolled.
This
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 will
also
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 give
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student
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students
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 a sense of belongingness,
pride
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and pride
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as well as
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cost efficient
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cost-efficient
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 and less hassle for
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student
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students
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 to think
on
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about
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 what to wear every day in going to
school
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. I support those high
schools
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 that require their
student
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 to wear their
uniforms
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 and do not
permits
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permit
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student
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students
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 to enter
school
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premisses
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premises
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 without proper
uniform
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uniforms
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.
Uniform
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The uniform
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also
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 is an important representation of
school
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 images. If you
were be
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are
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 engaged with
other
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another school
other schools
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school
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, wearing
of
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apply
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uniforms
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 is your only identity and it can boost your confidence and a sense of belongingness when
your
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you are
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 inside
others
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other
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school
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 premises, malls or public places. One of the many
reason
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reasons
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also
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 aside from having
self confidence
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self-confidence
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 and
sense
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a sense
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 of belongingness,
this
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 is
also
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a
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apply
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cost efficient
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cost-efficient
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 for high
school
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 students. They do not have
tobuy
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to buy
 more clothes to wear everybody, and they do not have to look for expensive and fashionable clothes.
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Student
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Students
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also
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have
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has
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a
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apply
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peace of mind and
hassle-free
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a hassle-free
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 day to decide on what they are going to wear every day
..
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.
...
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Therefore
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, wearing
of
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apply
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school
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uniforms
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 is still better than those who do not have one. High
schools
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who
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that
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emposes
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emphasise
 wearing
school
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uniforms
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still
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are still
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 the best options for most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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parents nowadays.

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coherence cohesion
Work on structuring your essay more logically. Consider using clear topic sentences at the start of each paragraph and provide a concluding sentence to reinforce the main idea.
task achievement
Be mindful of grammatical errors and typos. For instance, check for subject-verb agreement and proper usage of plurals, such as using "is" instead of "are" and "schools" instead of "school" in certain contexts.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to illustrate your points, such as personal anecdotes or hypothetical scenarios to support your arguments effectively.
task achievement
Good job in presenting a clear stance on why wearing uniforms is beneficial, and outlining clear reasons in favor of uniforms such as cost efficiency, identity, and confidence.
coherence cohesion
There is a conclusion that effectively summarizes the main points of the essay and reinforces your opinion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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