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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.
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The bar charts illustrate the percentage of the population that owned computers between 2002 and 2010,
as well as
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computer
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ownership
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 by
education
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 level for the years 2002 and 2010.
Overall
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,
computer
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ownership
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 increased significantly over the given period.
Additionally
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, higher levels of
education
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 were associated with greater
computer
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ownership
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, with the gap between different
education
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 levels narrowing by 2010. The first graph shows that
computer
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ownership
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 rose steadily from around 50% in 2002 to nearly 75% in 2010.
This
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 indicates a growing trend in technology access over time. The most significant increase occurred between 2006 and 2010. The second graph highlights the correlation between
education
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 and
computer
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ownership
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.In both years, individuals with postgraduate qualifications had the highest
ownership
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 rates,
while
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 those without a high school diploma had the lowest.
However
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, by 2010,
ownership
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 had increased across all
education
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 levels, with the largest rise among those with lower
education
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, ownership, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • population demographics
  • educational attainment
  • disparities
  • technological advancement
  • digital divide
  • market penetration
  • socio-economic factors
  • predictive insights
  • statistical significance
  • longitudinal study
  • accessibility
  • affordability
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