In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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many
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students
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like to live with their family in their hometown
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they study, others prefer to travel to a different city to attend
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. Despite of obvious benefits of moving away from family
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as greater independence, there are
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a significant number of disadvantages
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as lack of support and care. In my opinion, the disadvantages
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the advantages by a large margin. Living without family in a different town would allow
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to experience greater freedom. They will learn to live their own life and to make responsible decisions.
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will help them to gain maturity as they learn to handle different circumstances with their own intelligence.
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, they can
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taste the essence of a different culture and environment, and learn to modify their lifestyles
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to blend with the native people.
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, a recent article in the 'Live
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Life' magazine claimed that
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students
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living independently were at least 60% more successful
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to their career
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a different city than
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living with their
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.
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, living alone means that there will be
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distractions from young or newborn family members, and
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the
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can better focus on their academics.
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, living independently has numerous notable disadvantages. Family members often provide significant care, and moving away from them results in much less support being available.
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,
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are faced with additional responsibilities
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as cleaning their house, shopping for groceries and preparing their own
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along with
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all the other academic duties.
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, close family ties are necessary for mental stability and happiness, and a lack of
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results in a feeling of homesickness and mood swings that
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a negative impact on the
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's performance. In
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scenarios, if there is an accident, it becomes extremely difficult for a
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to cope
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without the presence of their family members.
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research carried out by the National
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's Bureau of Statistics revealed that one out of ten
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living alone in a new city, have to drop out and return to their family
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serious injury from road accidents. In conclusion, even though living independently
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studying
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university
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may lead to an increased capability of adapting to career requirements, homesickness, mental instability and threats of undesirable accidents make it more advantageous to stay with family as they can provide the
student
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with an umbrella of support and care whenever necessary.

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Ensure all points directly address the question and provide equal attention to both benefits and disadvantages.
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The arguments are generally supported by relevant examples and analysis.
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The main points are well-developed and supported.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • self-reliance
  • finance management
  • exposure
  • broaden horizons
  • open-minded
  • adaptability
  • conducive environment
  • isolation
  • homesickness
  • financial burden
  • household duties
  • academic responsibilities
  • personal growth
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