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The pie charts show the reasons (visiting friends/family, business, holiday, other) people fly from four airports in 2016.

The pie charts show the reasons (visiting friends/family, business, holiday, other) people fly from four airports in 2016.
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The pie charts compare the goals of
travel
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 for
travellers
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 opting for four different UK
airports
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 in 2016.
Overall
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, the
holiday
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 was the most common purpose at all
airports
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 except Heathrow, where
business
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travel
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 accounted for a significant
proportion
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.
In contrast
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, Luton had the highest percentage of
travellers
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 visiting
friends
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 and family. At Gatwick Airport, the majority of
passengers
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 (54%) travelled for holidays,
while
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 30% visited
friends
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 or family, and only 14% flew for
business
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 purposes. Heathrow had a different distribution, with
business
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travel
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 (28%) being nearly as common as
holiday
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travel
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 (33%),
while
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 37% of
passengers
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 visited
friends
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 or family, making it the highest among the four
airports
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 for
this
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 category. Luton airport showed a unique trend, as half (50%) of its
passengers
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 travelled to visit
friends
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 or family, the highest
proportion
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 among the
airports
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.
Holiday
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travel
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 accounted for 35%,
while
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business
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travel
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 was relatively low at 13%.
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,
the
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Stansted Airport had a large
proportion
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 of
passengers
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 travelling to visit
friends
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 and family (48%),
while
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 holidaymakers made up 36%, and
business
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travellers
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 constituted 14%. In summary,
holiday
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travel
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 was the primary reason for air
travel
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 at most
airports
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, except for Heathrow, which had a higher share of
business
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passengers
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. Luton and Stansted had the highest percentages of
travellers
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 visiting
friends
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 and family,
while
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 Gatwick had the greatest
proportion
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 of
holiday
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travellers
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words travel, travellers, airports, holiday, business, proportion, friends, passengers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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