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The chart shows the information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. Summarize the keu feature sand make comparison where relavant.

The chart shows the information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. Summarize the keu feature sand make comparison where relavant.
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The horizontal bar chart illustrates information about how
families
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 of a country spent their per week
income
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 in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, in 1968,
families
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spend
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spent
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 the highest amount of weekly
income
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in
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on
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 food,
while
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 in 2018,
families
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 invested the highest amount of
income
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 per week in leisure. In 1968, the
second
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 highest spendings of
families
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 were housing, clothing and
foorware
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footwear
, and in 2018, the
second
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 highest
income
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 of
families
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 was only housing. For household goods,
families
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 spent the same in both years. In 1968,
families
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 invested the highest proportion of their
income
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 per week in food, which was around 35%.
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, in 2018,
families
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 invested about 23% of their weekly
income
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 in leisure activities which was their highest expenditure.
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, in 1968,
families
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 invested approximately 10% of their weekly
income
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 in housing and clothing and
footware
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footwear
, which was their
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second largest
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second-largest
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expenditures
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expenditure
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. In 2018, the
second
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 largest spending of
families
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 was housing which was below 20%. In both years,
families
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 spent the same below 10% on household goods. For fuel and power,
families
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 spent above 5% and below 5% in 1968 and 2018, respectively. For personal
good
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goods
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,
families
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 spent around 8% in 1968, and in 2018, that expense decreased and only approximately 4% of their weekly
income
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 was invested on
perseonal
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personal
 goods.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, income, second with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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