Many people believe that women make better parents than men and that is why they have the greater role in raising children in most societies. Others claim that men are just as good as women at parenting. Write an essay expressing your point of view. Give reasons for your answers and provide relevant example and experience you might have.

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Nowadays ,many believe that women are more capable
in
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doing parenting
responsibilities
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while
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other
thinks
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men with active fatherhood
equal
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are equal
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to
the
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women in that
approch
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approach
.
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, I think parental partnership should be the modern
role
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in
todays
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family
insititution
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institution
. At the onset , there is no
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doubt
about the
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mother
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mother's
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role
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in the
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child
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child's
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life ,since she
consider
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as
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apply
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the primary caregiver with the maternal instinct to give the
child
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the
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empathy and love .
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, there is
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strong emotional bond between the kid and his
mother
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establish
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at
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the early
month
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of living and
continue
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continues
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during life with the patient and emotional intelligence
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whereas
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help
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to
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the juvenile properly .
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,
although
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there are widespread ideas in many
socities
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societies
that the father has
less
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fewer
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responsibilities
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and roles in raising children,
the
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active fatherhood has a significant effect by providing
finance
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and emotional
supports
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support
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for both the
child
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and the
mother
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in addition
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to the protective side .
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, in
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a
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traditional Arabic
family
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family,
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the father
play
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plays
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the dominant
role
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into
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in
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provideing
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providing
and
carriing
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caring
the
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for the
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family
responsibilities
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by being supportive and
leader
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a leader
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,
while
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the
mother
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take
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takes
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the other roles
unlike
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, unlike
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the modern family dynamics.
Furthermore
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,sharing parenting
responsibilities
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is one of the huge flex in
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apply
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nowadays parenting by sharing the both emotional and
finance
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financial
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aspects of life . In conclusion,
while
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historically women have been considered better parents
due to
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their
instinct
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instincts
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men
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also
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are also
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capable of fulfilling
this
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role
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.Parental partnership is necessary
to
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for
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raising
well-rounded
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a well-rounded
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child
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especially
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with the huge burden on both parents.

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Task Achievement
Try to clearly state your position in the introduction. For example, specify that you believe in the importance of parental partnership right at the beginning.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main point and is fully developed. You can add more examples or explanations to support your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to connect your ideas smoothly. This will help enhance the flow of your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Review your grammatical accuracy, especially subject-verb agreement and punctuation, to improve clarity and professionalism.
Content
You present a balanced view by considering both perspectives of parenting, which demonstrates critical thinking.
Content
You provide a relevant example from traditional Arabic families, which supports your argument about the father’s role.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parenting
  • nurturing
  • paternal
  • maternal
  • societal expectations
  • gender roles
  • co-parenting
  • emotional intelligence
  • child-rearing
  • caregiver
  • egalitarian
  • stereotype
  • nuclear family
  • single parent
  • shared custody
  • bonding
  • child development
  • primary caregiver
  • compassionate
  • empathetic
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