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The graph show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to university lecturer describing the data.

The graph show changes in spending habits of people in the UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to university lecturer describing the data.
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The pie charts compare the proportion of people's
habits
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 in the UK between 1971 and 2001.
Overall
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, it is readily apparent that all other
habits
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 had a growth and some had a decline.
Moreover
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, food had the highest proportion of
habits
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 at the beginning of the year.
To begin
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 with, cars and food had the largest share of
habits
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 with 22% and 44%, respectively.
However
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, whilst petrol, furniture, books and restaurants had the smallest percentage of
habits
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 with 10%, 9%, 6% and 7%, respectively in 1971.
Furthermore
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, computers had the lowest share of
habits
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 with 2% in 1971.
On the other hand
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, food dropped unexpectedly to 14% in 2001,
whereas
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 cars had a significant rise to 43% in 2001. Books were replaced at the least by computers with 1% and the latter soared markedly to 10% in 2001.Restaurants had a double to 17%,
while
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 petrol had a small decrease to 8%
at the end
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 of the year.
In contrast
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, furniture dipped minimally to 9 %
at the end
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 of the time

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words habits with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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