Some feel that it is impossible for a country to be economically progressive and environmentally friendly at the same time. Others disagree with this view. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.
A few people believe that a country cannot be economically progressive and eco-friendly at the same time because every innovation and technological advancement can cause some form of damage to
environment
. I totally agree with the statement and provide reasons for my stand in Add an article
the environment
this
essay.
On the one hand, Linking Words
cutting edge
technology is developing Add a hyphen
cutting-edge
Use synonyms
countries
economic growth. Change noun form
countries'
country's
For example
, developments in artificial intelligence, infrastructure development, Linking Words
tourism
are enhanced with technology and it rapidly increases Correct word choice
and tourism
economy
. At the same time, it releases carbon dioxide and Correct article usage
the economy
non degradable
electric wastes as a by-product. Add a hyphen
non-degradable
This
waste Linking Words
products
causes pollution and disrupts the habitat. Fix the agreement mistake
product
Moreover
, carbon emission causes global warming which, in Linking Words
turn
Add the comma(s)
turn,
lead
to natural catastrophes. Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
In addition
, infrastructure development requires Linking Words
lot
of Change the article
a lot
woods
so, more trees are cut down for Fix the agreement mistake
wood
this
.
Linking Words
On the other hand
, some believe that eco-friendly and sustainable natural energy can increase Linking Words
country's
economy without affecting Correct article usage
a country's
natural
environment. Add an article
the natural
For example
, Linking Words
construction
of windmills and solar power plants produces large Correct article usage
the construction
amount
of sustainable energy without causing pollution. Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
In particular
, using natural resources preserves Linking Words
forest
and improves the air and land quality. Some Fix the agreement mistake
forests
countries
are Use synonyms
adapting
electric vehicles which prevents carbon Correct your spelling
adopting
emission
and climate Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
changes
.
In conclusion, even though there are ways to improve Fix the agreement mistake
change
Use synonyms
countries
Change noun form
countries'
country's
economy
through Fix the agreement mistake
economies
eco friendly
developments still it is not enough for Add a hyphen
eco-friendly
Use synonyms
countries
growth. I totally agree that it is impossible for a country to be economically progressive and environment friendly at the same time.Change noun form
countries'
country's
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Task Achievement
Your introduction clearly presents the topic and your opinion, but it would benefit from slightly more context or background information to engage the reader further.
Coherence and Cohesion
While your ideas flow logically, consider using more cohesive devices (like 'firstly', 'in addition', 'however') to connect your points more clearly and guide the reader.
Coherence and Cohesion
In your conclusion, reiterate the key points made in the essay to emphasize your argument more effectively instead of just stating your opinion again.
Task Achievement
Your arguments are relevant and show a good understanding of the topic, particularly regarding the environmental implications of economic development.
Coherence and Cohesion
You provided a balanced view by discussing both perspectives before stating your opinion, which enhances the overall discussion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite