Some feel that it is impossible for a country to be economically progressive and environmentally friendly at the same time. Others disagree with this view. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

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A few people believe that a country cannot be economically progressive and eco-friendly at the same time because every innovation and technological advancement can cause some form of damage to
environment
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the environment
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. I totally agree with the statement and provide reasons for my stand in
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essay. On the one hand,
cutting edge
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technology is developing
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countries
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countries'
country's
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economic growth.
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, developments in artificial intelligence, infrastructure development,
tourism
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and tourism
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are enhanced with technology and it rapidly increases
economy
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the economy
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. At the same time, it releases carbon dioxide and
non degradable
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electric wastes as a by-product.
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waste
products
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causes pollution and disrupts the habitat.
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, carbon emission causes global warming which, in
turn
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lead
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leads
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to natural catastrophes.
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, infrastructure development requires
lot
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a lot
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of
woods
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wood
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so, more trees are cut down for
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.
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, some believe that eco-friendly and sustainable natural energy can increase
country's
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a country's
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economy without affecting
natural
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the natural
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environment.
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,
construction
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the construction
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of windmills and solar power plants produces large
amount
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amounts
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of sustainable energy without causing pollution.
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, using natural resources preserves
forest
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forests
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and improves the air and land quality. Some
countries
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are
adapting
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adopting
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electric vehicles which prevents carbon
emission
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emissions
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and climate
changes
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change
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. In conclusion, even though there are ways to improve
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countries
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economy
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economies
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through
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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developments still it is not enough for
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countries
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countries'
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growth. I totally agree that it is impossible for a country to be economically progressive and environment friendly at the same time.

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Task Achievement
Your introduction clearly presents the topic and your opinion, but it would benefit from slightly more context or background information to engage the reader further.
Coherence and Cohesion
While your ideas flow logically, consider using more cohesive devices (like 'firstly', 'in addition', 'however') to connect your points more clearly and guide the reader.
Coherence and Cohesion
In your conclusion, reiterate the key points made in the essay to emphasize your argument more effectively instead of just stating your opinion again.
Task Achievement
Your arguments are relevant and show a good understanding of the topic, particularly regarding the environmental implications of economic development.
Coherence and Cohesion
You provided a balanced view by discussing both perspectives before stating your opinion, which enhances the overall discussion.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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