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You are renting a flat from an agency. Your contract was for one year but you need to leave the flat two months early. Write a letter to the agency. In your letter * introduce yourself * ask to leave the flat before the contract finishes * explain why you need to break the contract.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter regarding my stay in Regina apartments. I have been living in
this
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 flat for
past
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the past
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 1 year since I moved to Canada for a job purpose.
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Initially
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Initially,
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 when I secured my stay in
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 place I was a student
in
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at
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abc
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ABC
 University. Later, I started working in
a
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the
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 private sector with good pay.
Inspite
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In spite
 of the resource billing issues going on at
office
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the office
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 currently, my manager
want
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wants
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 me to go back to
base
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the base
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 location immediately. Though my contract with
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apratment
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apartment
 has
few
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a few
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 more months left to complete 1 year in May, I would request you to consider breaking the lease prior to two months. Supposedly, my boss wants me to reach the consequent location by March end. Thank you for
the
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apply
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giving me the opportunity to stay here. I hope you understand my condition and take my request promptly. Kindly do the needful. Best Regards, Asha

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coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your thoughts more clearly within the paragraphs to enhance logical flow. For example, ensure that each paragraph centers around a single main idea.
task achievement
Make sure to proofread your letter for minor spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'inspite' (should be 'in spite') and 'apratment' (should be 'apartment').
suitable writing tone
Your tone is polite and respectful throughout the letter, which is essential in formal correspondence.
complete response
You successfully provided necessary details about your situation and reasons for leaving the apartment, which shows good effort in addressing the task requirements.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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