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School children are becoming far too dependent on computers. this is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. teacher need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all cost and go back to teaching basic study skills. do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that these days, a
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 has been playing a significant role in a child's life. The question is, what is the main effect of
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 method a teacher
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various applications which assist students to understand a subject.
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PowerPoint is a good program to help
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 to explain
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 and reach information to students.
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 the other hand, there are a number
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 in children's life. To clarify, a long time
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 causes a number of diseases
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 children. In conclusion, I strongly believe
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 have both side negative and positive
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. It is a good method in
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Use a wider range of vocabulary and grammar structures to express your ideas more clearly and effectively.
task achievement
You have addressed both sides of the argument, which shows an understanding of the complex issue.
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Your example regarding PowerPoint as a teaching tool is relevant and helps support your point.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dependence on technology
  • reading comprehension
  • traditional learning techniques
  • literacy skills
  • digital tools integration
  • educational outcomes
  • pedagogical strategies
  • information overload
  • interactive learning
  • educational software
  • balance in education
  • technological advancement
  • fundamental skills
  • creativity and critical thinking
  • well-rounded education
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