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The graph below shows contribution as % of India's GDP. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows contribution as % of India's GDP. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart details the constituent elements of India’s GDP divided into the
agriculture
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,
industry
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, and service sectors from 1960 to 2000. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
services
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 became by far the dominant field over the time surveyed, overtaking
agriculture
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, which declined considerably.
Industry
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 increased but displayed a far less extreme trend, ending the period above
agriculture
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. In 1960,
agriculture
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 represented the overwhelming majority of India’s total GDP at
near
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 63%, noticeably higher than
industry
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 and
services
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 at around 18% each. Over the next two decades,
agriculture
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 declined by 10% each year to fall to 45% in 1980
while
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 there were reciprocal rises for
industry
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 and
services
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, with both reaching just under 30% by the same year. From 1980,
agriculture
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 continued a consistent decline that terminated at 25% in 2000. The trends for the remaining sectors
then
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 diverged with
industry
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 plateauing and remaining relatively stable
around
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at around
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 23%.
In contrast
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, the contribution of
services
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 to
overall
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 GDP more than doubled with near 20% surges over the ensuing decades to finish at 63%, a figure identical to the data point for
agriculture
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 40 years prior.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words agriculture, industry, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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