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The table below shows the percentages of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentages of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the percentages of cyclists in the unknown town in 2011, divided by the
age
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 bands and genders. In conclusion, females have a higher tendency to use bikes compared to males. In terms of
age
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, the higher bicycle user percentage is owned by people from
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age
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ages
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 0 to 9. The table shows that bicycles are preferably used by people of younger
age
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, from 0-19 which has a percentage of above 20%. Meanwhile, the highest distribution comes from children in
age
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 group 0-9 with
the
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percentage
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percentages
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 of 52,5% and 51,2% for girls and boys, respectively. Followed by young adults, ranging from 10 to 19 years old 43,6% of females and 25,1% of males.
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bicycle
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number of bicycle
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 users
are
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significantly dropped in adults (from
age
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 20 to above 60) with a utilization rate below 20%.
Furthermore
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, people in
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age
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the age
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 category 40-59 are considered the lowest with female and male users are 13,7% and 9,3%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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