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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the movement of million
international
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of international
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traveler
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travelers
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 that happened from 1990 to 2005 and changes
at
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in
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 5 different areas (Africa, America, Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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, Europe and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East).
Overall
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, the greatest increase
of
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in
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 people who went
for
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on
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 international
travel
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could be
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apply
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started from 1990 to 1995 (over
the
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a
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15 year
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15-year
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 period),
while
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 the lowest increase started from 2000 to 2005. Europe
area
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 is the most significant changes for international
travel
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start
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starting
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 from 1990 to 1995 and followed by America in the second place. In terms of years, there was a gradual rise in the number of international
travelers
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travellers
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 from 1990 to 2000. Possible reasons for the growth in
travel
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such
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 as technological advancements, increased affluence, and globalization. A significant jump in international
travel
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 was observed between 2000 and 2005, compared to the
others
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other
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 year. Regarding regional
differences
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differences,
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 significant growth can be seen for Europe
Area
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 and followed by
steady
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a steady
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 increase for Asia and the Pacific
Area
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. Different countries
shown
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showed
have shown
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 up and down
for
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apply
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every 5
year
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years
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start
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starting
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 from 1990 to 2005. Middle East
area
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keep
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keeps
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as
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apply
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the lowest international
traveler
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traveller
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 rather than other countries.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words travel, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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