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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
this
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 modern world, an increasing number of people are choosing to migrate to another country for better livelihood;
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, it can cause strenuous issues
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 as communication
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problems
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 as they have to speak
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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. If asked, I bolster
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this
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 notion to a major extent. My justification is elaborated
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. There are a plethora of compelling reasons for
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 situation. The most predominant one is
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 problem. To elaborate
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,
someone
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 who
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 not speak well another
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 as they used to speak their mother
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 it will be harder for them to ask about suggestions from
foreigner
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foreigners
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such
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 as about location, making new friends and so on.
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, speaking
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a native
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language
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 only can create
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social
 problems as we can not able to socially
intract
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interact
 with new people. Another striking reason is that they
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 not able to explore
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the world
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 properly. To add to
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, the person who likes to explore different nations,
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will be able to speak all
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kinds
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 of languages in order to get comfortable travelling.
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, during exploring the world it will be necessary to talk with the folks who are already staying there as they are known to each and every place which can help you to visit more top-notiching places.
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, I should not overlook the other sides too. Because of the enhancement of technology, there
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 plenty of applications
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available
, from where we can translate from our
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 to their
language
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.
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, it will be convenient for them to talk with anyone.
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, it is a fact that despite there
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translator
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a translator
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, my justification convinces
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 it will create myriad problems
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 as communication and visiting places are logically acceptable.

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Improve the introduction by clearly stating your position and outlining your main points.
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Use clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to enhance logical structure and guide the reader through your arguments.
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Add more specific examples to support your claims, making them more relevant and relatable.
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Check for grammatical errors and ensure proper sentence structures.
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Your recognition of both sides of the argument adds depth to your essay.
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You provided some relevant examples that illustrate your points.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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