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You need a website for your business, and you would like to ask your friend to build it. •Include a brief description of your business •Explain what you would like to have on the website •Provide some ideas on the use of images on the website.

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Dear Sara, Hope you’re doing great. I’m sorry for not being in touch recently, I’ve been really busy opening my own store in the retail market. Actually, I was wondering if you could help me to make a
website
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. As you know,
while
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 I was studying Fashion and design in Rome,
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 worked in many branded shops like Zara and Prada, so I decided to run my business as a fashion designer and
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 opened a small shop in the City’s mall. Lots of people prefer to shop online so I think it’s time to have a
website
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 that can inform my customers about the pieces that are available in the shop. It would be great if you could design a
website
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 with separated sections like dress, skirt, shirt.
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, the
website
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 should be connected to
bank
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the bank
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 so that customers can
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 their payments without difficulties. I have taken loads of photos
from
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 clothes and I’ll send a selection of them soon. Perhaps it would be a good idea to show photographs of the new collection on the main page with small images of the items on
sales
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 in the corners. Please let me know if it is possible for you to help me. Best wishes Taban

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly format your points, such as using bullet points for different sections of the website or highlighting key features you want to include.
task achievement
Try to give more specific examples or details about the images you envision using, such as the type of style or themes that may match your brand.
positive
The letter has a clear and friendly tone, which is great for communication with a friend.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • website design
  • user-friendly
  • navigate
  • aesthetic
  • branding
  • content management system (CMS)
  • responsive design
  • high-quality images
  • graphic elements
  • visual appeal
  • e-commerce
  • product portfolio
  • search engine optimization (SEO)
  • interactive features
  • testimonials
  • call-to-action buttons
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