Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statemeent?

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It is a common belief that
computers
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have not been important equipment in the past 100 years.
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, I firmly believe that the most crucial invention in history is
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. It makes many changes in our workplace
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and plays
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role in our daily lifestyle.
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with,
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changed how we work and
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created new kinds of jobs. Before it was released to people, we charted and wrote all of the
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paperwork
by hand.
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, in hospitals, nurses and doctors had to write down all medical
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by hand. It was
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vulnerable
to
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mimicking
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physical dangers
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as pouring water or
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erasing
harassing
arising
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after using
computers
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as
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means of charting, it became easy to prevent those kinds of illegals or dangers.
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, that change created
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there
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as
medical
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programmer.
In addition
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,
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also
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play an important role in our lives. In
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of mailing,
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, without
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computers
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computers,
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we wrote down the letter and went to the post office to send it to others. These sequences took time and
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workers didn't have
a
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time to go there, so e-mail was literally amazing because it
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need that much time. Not only for mailing, but
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for gathering information is influenced by
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computers
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all over the world. We can obtain information just by typing and clicking at home nowadays. There is no need to go to the library or
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bookstore
for it.
To sum up
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,
computers
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created new technologies and jobs, and
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made our lives
convinient
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convenient
. For these reasons, I totally agree with the statement that the computer is a crucial invention for humans.

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Ensure your introduction clearly states your position regarding the statement. Consider rephrasing for clarity.
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Check for grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that may affect clarity. For example, review 'has not been important equipment' to better match your position.
coherence and cohesion
In your body paragraphs, ensure each point is adequately developed with clear explanations and examples.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words or phrases to improve the flow of your ideas, making transitions smoother between sentences and paragraphs.
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Strong conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and reiterates your agreement with the statement.
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Good attempt to provide examples to support your points regarding computers' impact on work and daily life.
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