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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Write a letter to your landlord about an increase in rent that you don't think is justified. In your letter say: - Why you are writing - What the problems are - What you want the landlord to do

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Dear Mr Thomas, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing in
regards
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 to the increase in the
rent
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 that I feel is unjust. As you know, there are currently four students
whom
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who
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 are working multiple jobs to support themselves, pay tuition fees and cover basic living expenses
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 as groceries and utilities.
With the
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rent
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 increase,
it
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has put an additional burden on us, and it has made it extremely difficult to manage our university commitments and finances. I kindly request that you
would
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apply
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consider providing us
a
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with a
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notice period of 30 days so that we
could
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 decide if we would want to continue staying in
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 place with the increased
rent
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.
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, I would appreciate an opportunity to discuss the conditions of the
rent
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. Is there a possibility of negotiating the amount or any alternatives for tenants with financial strain
.
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 Thank you for your attention to
this
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 matter. I hope for a prompt reply from you. Kind regards, Joscelin

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task response
Consider providing more specific examples of the problems caused by the rent increase to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph stays focused on a single idea. The structure is generally good, but tightening the ideas can help.
suitable writing tone
The tone is polite and respectful, which is appropriate for this type of correspondence.
logical structure
Your letter has a clear structure with a greeting, body, and closing, making it easy to read.
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