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Nowadays, experience is more valued in the workplace than knowledge in many countries. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries,employers prefer
experience
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 rather than the knowledge of the candidates. I believe that
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benefits
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the benefits
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 of
this
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 outweigh the demerits. On the one hand, the first benefit is that experienced candidates have the practical
skill
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skills
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 to handle every task
of
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 the workplace. They are able to
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take
tackle
 the problems of the organisation with the solution
due to
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 their previous work
experience
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, If any
company
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 is struggling to maintain
their
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 quality of
products
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its products
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then
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 it would be best to hire
experienced
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an experienced
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 person to solve
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 problem.
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,it is helpful to reduce the training expenses and time of the
company
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.
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Company
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The company
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 has to give training regarding
work
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the work
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 of the
company
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 to
those candidate
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 who
does
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do
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 not have
experience
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, and it is
also
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 time
consuming
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time-consuming
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 process .Experienced person has the ability to adapt
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 every kind of environment in the
company
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,they can easily co-operate with other employees . It could
helpful
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be helpful
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 to
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company
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the company
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 because he/she can easily perform well as a
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presenter
 in business meetings on
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behalf of the
company
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On the other hand
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, the first demerit is that people who
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 not have
experience
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 can lose new opportunities of getting jobs
in particular
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 fields.They might lose their vision of life
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 the lack of
experience
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 in their field.
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, some jobs only need
knowlegde
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knowledge
 to perform any task in the
company
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,which
are
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is
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 not possible with
experience
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, To solve any court case of the
company
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 ,there is a need
of
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lawyer
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a lawyer
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 who would have the knowledge of legal solutions. In conclusion, there are more benefits of
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the experienced
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 person on
workplace
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the workplace
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 of
th
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the
company
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 , and it can
tacklle
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tackle
 some issues of the companies but demerits can not be ignored.

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task achievement
Make sure to elaborate on your ideas with more details and examples, and clearly indicate how each point relates to the overall argument about the advantages outweighing the disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to the organization of your paragraphs. Ensure each paragraph contains a clear topic sentence and a concluding statement that links back to the main argument.
coherence and cohesion
Work on grammar and sentence structure to improve the clarity of your writing. For instance, avoid run-on sentences and ensure proper punctuation is used between clauses.
task achievement
You have presented both sides of the argument, which shows good critical thinking and balance.
task achievement
Your examples illustrate your points well and help to clarify your understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • valued
  • workplace
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • mentor
  • colleagues
  • innovation
  • stagnation
  • traditional methods
  • recent graduates
  • theoretical knowledge
  • diversity
  • viewpoints
  • proven ability
  • stability
  • industries
  • technology
  • adaptation
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