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The maps below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The above maps illustrate the key differences that took place in the public Grange
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park
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Park
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 between the years 1920 and 2025.
Overall
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 the
park
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 is still located in the same place over the years, having 2 main entrances. One facing Eldon Street and another parallel that will get you to
the
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Arnold Avenue. The
park
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 can be divided into 3 main sections. A main central part,
right
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 and left wings. With a closer look at the central section. It used to be a large fountain in 1920,
then
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 it has been turned into a garden of roses surrounded by seats from all directions. Moving to the
right
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 section, the top
right
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 part has
had
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a rose garden and a pond for water plants, which both have been replaced nowadays with a cafe and a children's playground
instead
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. As for the bottom
right
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 section, it used to be a glasshouse and now it has been turned into a water feature. On the opposite side of the
park
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, the left wing. still has a rose garden on the top left as it used to.
However
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, the bottom left
got
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 emptied and the middle left musician stage has been transformed into an amphitheatre for concerts.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, right with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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