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Band 3.5

The job market today is very competitive and it is best to choose a career or field of study early in order to get a good job later in life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that job standards were upgraded compared to the past time.
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 it is held belief that to get a job that matches your qualifications you must early decide what is your major of study
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 your career field because of the competitive market, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that choosing a career or field to be your passion for the rest of your life requires allocating too much attention and sufficient time at the same time.
This
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 essay will explain my perspective.
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 with, Another point to consider, In conclusion, despite people having different points of view, I tend to believe that

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your thesis statement clearly reflects your stance on the topic. Provide clear topic sentences for each paragraph to guide the reader.
task achievement
Develop your arguments with more specific examples and explanations to support your points. This will enhance the clarity and depth of your discussion.
task achievement
You have identified the main points and presented a viewpoint, which is a good start for Task Achievement.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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