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The pie chart below represents the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The bar chart shows how these causes affected three regions of the world in the 1990s. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below represents the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The bar chart shows how these causes affected three regions of the world in the 1990s. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts give information about the causes behind farm degradation and their impacts on three regions around the world in 1990.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the three reasons (deforestation, over-grazing and cultivation) had a similar impact on land degradation.
On the other hand
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, The highest percentage of land affected where in Europe
while
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 the lowest was in North America.
Also
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, the causes differed significantly from one
contenint
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continent
 to another. In detail, One-third of
agriculture
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agricultural
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 lands have faced deterioration
due to
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 over gazing which is slightly higher than that of deforestation (30%) and over-cultivation (28%). Less than 7% of lands are affected by other undisclosed reasons. Europe has the highest percentage of degraded lands with 23% compared to 12% in Oceania and 5% in North America. Deforestation accounts for almost 10% of agricultural decline in Europe, compared to 7.7% and 5.5%
due to
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 over-cultivation and over-grazing.
However
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, the leading cause in North America is overcultivation
whereas
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 in Oceania it is overgrazing.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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