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In order to study at universities, students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all of the students can afford them so people think university education should be free for everyone. To what extend do u agree or disagree?

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Education
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an
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 vital role in
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 of
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 career of an individual.
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,
Education
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 is not free especially when universities
charges
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 a lot of
fees
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 from their
students
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.
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, I completely agree with the people that
tuition
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fees
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he
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 waived
off
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and every
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students
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 should be able to continue their
education
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 at no cost. First of all, charging no
tuition
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fees
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 means no financial burden.
Students
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 had to work hectic hours to cover their
tuition
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fees
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. These not only affect their physical health but
it
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also
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deprives
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 them
from
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 focusing and concentrating on their studies.
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: Only in the United States, almost 75% of the
students
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 work both
pn-campus
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on-campus
 and off-campus to make enough to pay for their
fees
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. The
education
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administrative
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 needs to enforce budget allocation for
student's
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students'
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tuition
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fees
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.
Secondly
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, If
education
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fees
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 are waived
off
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,
students
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 can
soley priortize
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solely prioritise
 on their studies. It will give them an opportunity to uplift their skills which
helps
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 them
on
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in
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career
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their career
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 development. It not only helps the
students
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,
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 but
also
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 the country itself.
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: The country can
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 because the skills can be used in
work
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the work
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 industry which increases
the
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productivity and
the
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positive outcomes.
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, I completely agree that
students
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 should be able to continue their
education
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 with no
tuition
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fees
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 because it automatically brings
a
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apply
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positice
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positive
 outcomes
on
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for
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 both
students
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 and on
country's
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the country's
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 financial development.

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grammar
Ensure grammatical accuracy, such as subject-verb agreement. For instance, change 'every students' to 'every student'.
vocabulary
Vary your vocabulary and aim for more sophisticated expressions to enhance your writing quality.
coherence
Provide clearer transitions between ideas and paragraphs to improve the flow of your essay.
examples
Include more relevant examples to support your arguments, particularly in the second body paragraph.
strength
Your essay clearly states your opinion, which is an important aspect of task achievement.
strength
You provided examples to support your argument, which helps to illustrate your points effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tuition fees
  • financial background
  • equal opportunities
  • economic growth
  • educated workforce
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • tax revenues
  • devaluation of degrees
  • financial burden
  • higher taxes
  • essential services
  • perceived value
  • motivation
  • financial stake
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