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The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Enviromental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Enviromental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the number of disturbances conveyed to
Enviromental
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Environmental
 Health
officer
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officers
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 about noise in Newtown from 1980 to 1996.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 domestic/household was the highest value in terms of complaints in the given graph
while
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 road works had the lowest number
at
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in
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 the same year when
,
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 in 1996. It is
noticable
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noticeable
 that road works displayed
downward
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a downward
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 trend between 1980 and 1996 years, but it had just over 600 complaints, which
are
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is
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 the best number in 1980.
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, in 1996,
this
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 discomfort saw
quite
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 fast decline and
considerable
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 decreased
with
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 just under 100.
In contrast
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,
factories
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 noises gradually increased to about 700 until 1988. After 1988,
this
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 figure witnessed consistently stable with far fewer
reduction
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reductions
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.
On the other hand
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, traffic noise and domestic/
house hold
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household
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 profiles illustrated
same
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the same
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 trend,
meant
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 they were moving the parallel between 1980 and 1988 years. In
additon
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addition
, traffic noise and domestic/household
account
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 for 300 and 500 respectively, in 1980. Domestic/household,
specially
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 after 1988, sharply climbed to just well 1200, which is
overwhelming
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 majority compared to other groups in 1996, yet traffick
complaint
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complaints
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 had slightly ascending by 600
at
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the
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that year.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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