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The chart below shows the percentages of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentages of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the bar chart given illustrates the
households
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' percentages in owned and rented
accommodation
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 in
particulary
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particular
particularly
 areas which are English and Wales from 1918 to 2011. Based on an
overall
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 perspective, it can be seen that from 1918 to 1961,
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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 attained the highest
percentage
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.
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,
households
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 in rented
accommodation
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 obtained the highest
percentage
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 between 1981 to 2011.
Moreover
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, in 1971, these groups remained in similar
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percentage
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percentages
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 which was 50% of
households
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. From an initial figure,
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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 started from around 22% in 1918.
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, there was a growth to around 32% in 1939 and remained stable in 1953.
Furthermore
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, in 1961,
this
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 group increased to 40%
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 and reached its peak in 2001 by around 69%.
However
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, in the following years,
this
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 group dropped its
percentage
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 by around 65%.
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, from the beginning,
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of
households
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 in rented
accommodation
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 was around 75%. In the next years, its
percentage
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 dropped and reached its valley in 2001 by around 32%. Meanwhile, in 2011, the
percentage
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 grew to around 35%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, accommodation, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 7 times.
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