IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, Numerous numbers of
countries
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faced
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face
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 financial
crisis
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crises
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 sometimes a great number of other
countries
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 aid them financially.But
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countries
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country's
countries'
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penilessness
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pennilessness
 still exists.some people believe that they should help them out with
other sort
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another sort
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 of help,
for
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 some extent
i
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am agree
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 with
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 statement.
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, financial disasters are
came
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coming
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 in all over the world.Some
countries
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 use their financial ministries to get rid of
those crisis
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that crisis
those crises
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 but some cannot.
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,
countries
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 like America, Russia and
china
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China
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helps
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help
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countries
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 in their difficult times.
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 when Japan had
Tsunami
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a Tsunami
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 in
year
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the year
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 2011 these
countries
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help
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helped
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 Japanese people with all
sort
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sorts
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 of help like money, food, water
and
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apply
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etc.
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,When it comes to
aid
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aiding
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 poor
countries
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on
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in
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 their financial situation it is not possible for big
countries
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 to help them all the time.Moving on, Big nations used to help them by trading between these nations on small scales.Likely, a small trade between India and
afganistan
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Afghanistan
is
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 made
from
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 a very long time and it somehow
help
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 Afganistan with its economy.
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,
i
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I
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 think
by
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apply
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helping financially poor
countries
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 will not help them all the time
where as
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whereas
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 we should suggest
them
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to them
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 a good trading idea from where they can have a good exchange between big and small
countries
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.

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines your position on the topic. Try rephrasing the prompt and explicitly stating your agreement or disagreement.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to provide a clear conclusion that summarizes your main points and reinforces your position in the essay.
coherence cohesion
Improve the clarity of your arguments by structuring your paragraphs with clear topic sentences and ensuring each point logically supports your overall argument.
task achievement
You have highlighted the need for alternative forms of aid, which is a relevant aspect of the discussion.
task achievement
Examples, like Japan's tsunami aid, demonstrate your ability to connect real-world situations to your arguments.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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