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The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 line graph provides key information about
radio
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 and
television
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audieces
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audiences
 throughout the
day
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 in 1992. Measuring the audiences by
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
UK
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the UK
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 population (over 4 years old) and time of
day
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 or night.
overall
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, it is clear from the graph that people
prefere
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prefer
 to listen to
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radio
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the radio
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at
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in
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early
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the early
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 morning
,
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apply
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 and watch
television
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 in the afternoon.
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, number of people who watch
television
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 is much more than those who prefer
radio
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.
whereas
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 after
miday
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midday
 ratio for both
television
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 and
radio
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 audiences remains steady.
According to
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 what is shown,
at
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in
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morning
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the morning
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 people listen to
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radio
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the radio
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, as most of them are busy preparing food, driving to work or on the bus.
Ratio
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The ratio
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 of
radio
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 audiences
decrease
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decreases
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 progressively throughout the
day
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, reaching the minimum level after midnight. In
term
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terms
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 of
television
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audience
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audience,
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 the rate fluctuates from 6 am to 2 pm between 1% to 20%,
afterward
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afterwards
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 the rate of audience dramatically
increase
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increases
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 to reach more than 40% of the population reaching
maximum
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a maximum
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 level at 8 pm,
this
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 is the time prefered by most of the population because they return from
busy
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a busy
the busy
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day
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 and have dinner together and watch
television
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words radio, television, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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