Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Environmental problems have had a demonstrable effect on our planet,
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some people believe that the
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should take some action to tackle these problems
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because these are the big scale problem for
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person able to handle.
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, others oppose that it should
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start
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individual
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individuals
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instead
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of
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any regulation from the
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This
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essay will discuss both points and conclude relevant
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. On
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hand, many people believe that the
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is the main factor that can establish an environmental
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protection
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law, like
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any cars that have
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more
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than 15 years,
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because
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they
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produces
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more CO2 gas, compared with the new
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that consist of new technology to control CO2 releases.
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Furthermore
, the
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's power can imply to everyone not only
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people
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but
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organisation
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organisations
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that produce more
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emissions
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than
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individuals
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as well, by increasing punishment
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those manufacturers that provide dangerous
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gas
more than
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the law
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standard
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standards
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, as to protect our
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environment
.
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, global protection can be immediately started with individuals who live and consume world
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resources
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, because there are many approaches that
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easy and practicable, which can begin with
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to decrease
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pollution.
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as reducing
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unnecessary waste like plastic
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by
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changing
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personal
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reused
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instead
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of plastic, or even car-shared between
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families
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and
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neighbourhoods
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that can reduce
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the CO2
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releasing
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rate.
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, these simple activities can
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accumulate
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many positive effects.
To conclude
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,
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people believe the
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should be the main factor
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in
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solving
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environmental issue,
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apply
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this
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essay believes that the greatest power could be started by the cooperation of
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the individual
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individual
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individuals
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, and all of us should have responsibility for our planet
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instead
of waiting for any announcements,
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there is only a small effect from us,
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if it
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together it will lead to more positive effect certainly.

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introduction
Consider refining your thesis statement in the introduction to make your position clearer. Instead of saying 'conclude relevant idea', specify what your conclusion will be.
supporting argument
Try to provide a more detailed explanation or specific examples to support your arguments. For instance, when discussing individual actions, you could mention successful initiatives in communities that have reduced waste or CO2 emissions.
conclusion
In your conclusion, restate your opinion more directly and strengthen it by summarizing the key arguments made in the essay.
content
You've addressed both views well and provided a balanced discussion of the roles of government and individuals in solving environmental problems.
structure
Your introduction and conclusion effectively frame your discussion, setting a clear stage for your arguments.

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