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Since the 18th century technological advances have replaced people in the workplace.with today's technology this process is happening at a greater rate.Technology is increasinly responsible for unemployment. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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Dear SellerI writing to you about the red and long sleeves shirt I bought at your shop in the Sanko Park Mall
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issue When I saw
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from your shop ı liked it so much and ı bought
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 ı wore one time when ı wore had not any problem until wash to washing machine ı washed
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it to 60’ degree sensitive program When after ı washed
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was torn and it has been shattered and its colour was so fade I used my washing machine for my other clothes but has not been any torn or fading
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 problem is not about my washing machine And ı think the problem is not about to degree and program I don't know why
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 happened I liked your prices and your brands' clothes
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 reason ı want replacement my shirt if you will replacement ı will please so much I look forward to your response Kind regards

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coherence and cohesion
Your letter lacks a clear structure. Try organizing your points into paragraphs: one for your introduction, one for the main issue, and one for the conclusion and request.
language accuracy
Make sure to proofread your writing for grammar and spelling errors. Common mistakes affect the clarity of your message.
task achievement
Clearly state your expectations for a resolution, such as a specific request for a replacement or refund, to make your request more effective.
task achievement
You clearly express your dissatisfaction and the reasons for it, which demonstrates a good understanding of the task.
task achievement
Your use of a polite tone is commendable; it sets a favorable tone for your request.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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