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The diagram below shows the plan of a library in 2001 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the plan of a library in 2001 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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These
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 two maps illustrate the
changed
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changes
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 that happened in a library between the years 2001 and 2009. It is clear from the
gragh
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graph
 that, many
changes
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 took place in the
ground
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floor
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 over the periods.
According to
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 what is shown,
the
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on the
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ground
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floor
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 in 2001, the entrance was
locat
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located
 in the south near
to
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apply
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the stairs. above the
entrance
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entrance,
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 there is
librarian's
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a librarian's
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 desk. In the
west
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west,
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 there are two
room
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rooms
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,
self help
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self-help
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 and history,
while
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 in the north is
the
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apply
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fiction. In the middle of the
ground
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floor
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floor,
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 there are many tables.
Moreover
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, in the
east
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East
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 the newspapers and periodicals. In 2009, many
changes
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occoured
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occurred
in
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on
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 the
ground
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floor
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 of
library
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the library
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. The entrance, stairs and the librarian's desk
still
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are still
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 the same as before with no
changes
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.
However
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in
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on
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 the west side
to west- north
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the west-to-north
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 had more added
rooms
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room
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, for history, fiction,
self help
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self-help
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, kitchen, economics and the
last
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 is
law
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the law
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. In the north
side
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side,
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 the
ficition
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fiction
 changed into children's books. In the
central
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centre
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 of the
place
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place,
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 there was no
different
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difference
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than
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from
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 before, but the size of
table
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the table
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being
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was
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 bigger. Under the children's book room, there is
children's
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a children's
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 area specially for kids. In the
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east,
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east
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East
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 the place changed from
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and periodicals to films and DVDs. Computers were in the
east - south
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east-south
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.
To sum up
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 we could say that, a lot of
changes
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 happened in the library
during
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over
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 the years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, ground, floor with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 7 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-service machines
  • computer stations
  • digital resources
  • book sections
  • fiction, non-fiction, reference
  • café area
  • repositioned
  • user preferences
  • management strategies
  • children's area
  • youth engagement
  • educational activities
  • meeting rooms
  • collaborative spaces
  • community events
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