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The chart below shows the percentages of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentages of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the proportion of rented
accommdation
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accommodation
 and private households in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011. It is clear from the graph that owned households
is increase
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increased
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 rapidly throughout the period,
while
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 the rented
houses
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decrease
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decreased
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 significantly.
According to
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 what is shown, the
private
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number of private
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houses
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 in 1950 was just above third.
Then
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 it kept
rasing untile
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rising until
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it reached half in 1970.
Moreover
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, in 1980 and 2000 the highest percentage of
the
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apply
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houses
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rocket
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around 70% .
However
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,
in
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from
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the
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apply
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2010 to
2020
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2020,
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 the ratio went down slightly. The ratio of
the
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apply
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rented households in 1950 was just under 70%, which was the highest
amoung
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among
amount
 rented
houses
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 in that year. After that proportion dropped through the years from 1960 to 2000 were about exactly
third
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a third
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. In
the
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apply
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2010 and
2020
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2020,
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 the number of the
accommdation
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accommodation
climb
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climbed
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 gradually.
To sum up
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 we could say that people prefer to start buying their
owne
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own
houses
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,
whereas
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 they stopped
rented
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renting
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household
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households
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 now.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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