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The presented line graph illustrates the number of passengers travelling differents types of vehicles such as cars, trains and buses on a daily basis from 1970 to 2030.

The presented line graph illustrates the number of passengers travelling differents types of vehicles such as cars, trains and buses on a daily basis from 1970 to 2030.
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The given line graph shows how much occupants
was
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travelled in various of transportation over a
period
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 of 60 years between 1970 and 2030. Units are measured in millions.
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, it can clearly be seen that the occupants of all
trip
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trips
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 rose gradually throughout the given
period
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, with the exception of trains.
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, the cars
was
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highest
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the highest
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level
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 of
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the trip
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trip
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trips
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 over a
period
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. In terms of two
transportations
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transportation
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 with the highest
level
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, cars and buses started at around 5 and 2 respectively. In the following 10 years, cars remained stable and rose gradually over a
period
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 and reached a peak of 9 in 2030.
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, Buses
was
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the
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 lowest
level
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 from the beginning of the year to 2010, it
then
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 climbed dramatically and peaked at about 5 in the final year. Regarding
to
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the other transportation with the lowest
level
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, Trains started at around 4 at the start. In the following years, the amount experienced a significant fall and hit a trough at 3
at the end
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 of the year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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