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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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This
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 map provides
key
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a key
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an
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apply
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overview
about
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of
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 the
manufactoring
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manufacturing
area
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 in Norbiton town, and
domenstrating
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demonstrates
 the upcoming development .
Overall
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, it is clear from the map that there is an obvious
changes
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change
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 planned to be in
this
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area
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.
In addition
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, the industrial
area
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 will be turned
to
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into
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 a residential place with all of
it's
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its
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 supplies that people use on a daily basis.
Whereas
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, paved
Street
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streets
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 are settled to make the movement more easy between the places.
According to
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 what is shown, South
to
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of
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 the river, all of the factories were removed from the
area
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 and new houses were constructed and distributed in a certain manner. we can see that there is
also
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 a medical Centre and shops were built. On the southeastern
side
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side,
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 there is a school,
beside
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and beside
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 it the playground. the playground is near the river.
In
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On
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 the Northern side, the farmland remained the same and only one building was added
moreover
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 a bridge was
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constructed
contructed
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constructed
to
facilitates
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facilitate
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 the movement between the two sides of the river.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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