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Travelling in group with a tour guide is the best way to travel. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no doubt that these days travelling is a
favorite
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 pastime of people. The question is, is travelling in
the
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group
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 the best
way
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for travelling
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to travel
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? In
this
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 essay, I am going to discuss the position of
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this
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apply
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travelling with
the
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a
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group
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 including a
tour
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guide
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is
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as
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best
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way
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for
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to
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 travel. In terms of disadvantages, it could
also
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 lead to an awful vacation experience.
Firstly
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, you should wake up at the scheduled
time
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 and go with a
group
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 at
specific
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time
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. Take,
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, if the
group
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 decides to visit the beach at 5 pm,
then
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 you have no other option but to follow them.
Secondly
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, you may be visiting some places you did not like and spend more
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 .
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, the
tour
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guide
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 will tell you about all the
place
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places
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 to visit and give you more information than you need, making you uncomfortable.
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, travelling in a
group
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 with a
guide
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 might be the best
way
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 to travel. The main reason given to support
this
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 claim is that you will not get lost .To illustrate, you will have your own schedule, and you know where you are going every day and at which
time
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.
In other words
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, you will be safe with the
group
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 and
tour
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guide
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 travelling .
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, you will accept new information. In conclusion,
although
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 travelling with
the
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a
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group
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 including the
tour
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guide
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 may lead you to have
good
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a good
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 experience and make new friends. I believe travelling alone is the best
way
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 to travel, as we can enjoy our trip without any restrictions. 259 words

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task achievement
Try to clearly state your position in the introduction. Although you mention the debate, it would be better to take a clear stance early on.
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Ensure that each point you make is clearly supported with examples or explanations. This will help to make your argument stronger and more convincing.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the flow of your ideas. Try to use linking words to connect your points better, making it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Revisit the structure of your conclusion. It should not only summarize your points but also reaffirm your main argument or position clearly.
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You have successfully identified both advantages and disadvantages of group travel, which demonstrates balanced thinking.
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