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Band 1.5

What can individuals do to reduce environmental pollution?

In my opinion, addressing pollution is a key issue in
this
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 context. To prevent
the
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pollution individually is
becoming
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to become
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 more aware
about
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of
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 what happening around you and
taking
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 steps
accordingly
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. As far as I know, governments are
also
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 responsible for protecting nature and balancing the ecological environment. With the help of organizations, we are able to preserve green areas and
ruduce
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reduce
 pollution. From my perspective, there are some key points to follow; 1.Reducing carbon emissions by using public transportation
instead
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 of your own car. 2.Taking responsibility against your actions that may harm
the
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mother nature. 3.Using renewable resources
,
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 and recycling
activity
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activities
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.

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You have identified important strategies for reducing pollution, which shows a good understanding of the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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