The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison wire relevant

The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison wire relevant
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The table illustrates the number of cell phones(Nokia,Ericcon, Samsung, Motorola, Apple) sold in millions between 2006 and 2012
Overall
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, the
predominate
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predominant
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position
initially
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belonged to Samsung.
Whereas
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,
it
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its
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oppose
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could be clearly
be
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apply
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seen
it
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apply
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soon Ericssio and Motorola had significantly lower. After analysing the table, it was clearly seen that Samsung showed a steady growth
so
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of
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117 million in 2006 and 396.5 in 2012.
In
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contrast
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contrast,
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Motorola phone in 2007 it was 210,
then
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it dropped rapidly by 182.
Furthermore
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, with 2.3 million millions in
2006
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2006,
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Apple
show
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showed
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a rapid increase, 135.8 in 2012.
However
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, Nokia was the second most smartphone seller company,
345
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from 345
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into
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in
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2006 to 335 in 2012

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • sales figures
  • consumer behavior
  • market dynamics
  • significant changes
  • dramatic increases
  • decreases
  • introduction of technology
  • economic factors
  • market saturation
  • implications
  • manufacturers
  • competition
  • innovation pressures
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