It is now possible for researchers to study the behavior of young children in an attempt to predict whether they will grow up to be criminals. To what extent do you think crime is determined by genetics? Is it possible to stop children from growing up to be criminals?

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Technology is very well advanced that the personality traits of children can be checked by genetic

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where any criminal characteristics can be detected at an early phase. I completely adhere to the point

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chromosomal patterns can influence negatively . If it

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can be controlled by proper support from the regulators.

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with, scientists claim that some individuals are born with certain characteristic

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Develop your introduction further to clearly outline your viewpoint and give a brief overview of the main points of your essay.

coherence and cohesion

Ensure your points are logically sequenced and linked with appropriate cohesive devices to improve flow.

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Support your points with relevant examples or evidence to strengthen your argument regarding the influence of genetics on criminal behavior.

task achievement

The essay presents a clear stance on the influence of genetics on criminal behavior, which is important for task achievement.

task achievement

There is an attempt to address the potential for intervention, showing a consideration of solutions rather than just outlining problems.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

69 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today, many people do not know their neighbors. Why is this? What can be done about this?

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