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Writing Samples
Band 3

Nowadays more and more people are using media like TV or online platforms to read news instead of reading newspapers. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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 of technology, most
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people are watching TV or using online platforms to learn the
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 rather than read newspapers.
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. Digital
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 sources provide instant access to a vast amount of information with just a few clicks, making it more convenient for users.
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 platforms often spread misinformation, especially with the rise of AI-generated content and unverified sources.
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 of the companies try to get very high views
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 creating wrong videos via AI. Unlike, reading newspapers are reliable for
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, there are some couples of references that make it academic.
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 There have been terrible fires in America recently, but people made fake videos to make it look even more terrible
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 and followers. In conclusion, It's the year of technology,
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individuals, like to watch things online, the problem can be solved by just opening reliable websites

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task achievement
Make sure the introduction clearly outlines the main points that will be discussed in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that you develop it fully with examples and explanations.
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Clarify your arguments by providing more detailed examples and explanations, especially when discussing the drawbacks of online news.
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You have identified both advantages and disadvantages of using online media versus newspapers, which is essential for task response.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a logical structure, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instant access
  • latest developments
  • rapidly changing world
  • interactive nature
  • comprehensive understanding
  • dynamic
  • inclusive society
  • environmental benefits
  • carbon footprint
  • reliability
  • dissemination
  • unverified
  • biased news
  • investigative journalism
  • journalistic standards
  • thorough
  • accurate
  • news reporting
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