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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph compares the expenditure of the families in 8
diffenrent
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different
 categories between 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, fuel and power was the highest number in
both
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 years, fuel and power experienced the lowest amount. Housing, Transport, and
lesisure
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leisure
 showed similar patterns. Personal
goods
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and
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apply
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clothing and
footware
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footwear
 remained the small number. Household
goods
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was
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 totally equal in
both
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 years. By 1968, the food provided the highest spent among all
cetegories
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categories
, accounted for 35%, but it dropped almost half to around 16% in 2018. The leisure
cetegory
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category
 represented
the
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a
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 significant growth from around 7% in 1968 to around 23% in 2018. These patterns were mirrored by the housing and
the
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apply
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transport, at around 10% rose to 18%, and 7% grew to 14%, respectively. The
househlod
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household
goods
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cetegory
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category
 remained
unchange
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unchanged
 in
both
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 studying
period
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periods
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, at
round
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around
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 7%. the clothing and
footware
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footwear
 type fell from around 10% in 1968 to just 5% by 2018, followed by the
pernonal
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personal
goods
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 that experienced
the
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a
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 similar decrease from 8% in 1968 to about 4% in 2018. The lowest expenditure in
both
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 years was fuel and power,
accounted
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which accounted
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 for just 6% in 1968, and decreased to about 4% in 2018.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words both, goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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