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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Living in a country where you have to
use
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speech
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 can cause huge social and applicable. I agree with that situation. We have 2
problem
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about
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 speaking of foreign
language
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First
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 reason is
difficulty
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the difficulty
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of
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language
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,
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 and worry about forgetting own
speech
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Second
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 reason is about
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accent
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the accent
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. First of
all
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all,
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 it might be difficult.
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Whereas
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, it is not easy to learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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furthermore
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 you need to
use
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this
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speech
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 in everyday life. After a long time
while
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 you continue to live there and
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use
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 the country some of them don’t like foreign
speech
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. They
thinks
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so
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that
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 if you live
their
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in their
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 country you
must
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need to learn their
language
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 and
use
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this
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your
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in your
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 daily life.
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, if you go
Hungary
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to Hungary
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 you can’t work
as
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in
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 a good position because if you work
official
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an official
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 job like
engineer
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an engineer
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, lawyer,
police
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or police
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 you should learn
Hungarian
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the Hungarian
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language
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. In my opinion second reason is
accent
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likewise
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the words
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 it doesn’t matter if you don’t have
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accent
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an accent
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. I mean it is not important to talk
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,
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however
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however,
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 at least the other person should understand you.
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instance
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instance,
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 in
Germany
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Germany,
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 they have many
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 but most of
time
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the time
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 they struggle to understand and communicate
each
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with each
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 other.
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hand
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hand,
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 you are not German it will be challenging for you. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits.These two problems
is
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 my objective it depends on the person some of them maybe don’t agree with me,
its
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 not a problem because everybody has
own
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their own
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 opinions.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to structure paragraphs clearly, with each paragraph focused on a single idea. Each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence and supporting sentences.
task achievement
Develop your ideas further, providing more detailed explanations and examples to enhance clarity and depth of your arguments.
grammatical range and accuracy
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy, clarity, and the proper use of vocabulary to convey your ideas more effectively.
task achievement
You have identified relevant social and practical problems that arise from using a foreign language in a new country.
task achievement
Your opinion is clearly stated, and you attempt to present reasons to support your viewpoint.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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