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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In recent years, the trend of consuming global
food
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supermarket
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supermarkets
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 has become increasingly noticeable across a wide range of societies.
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 development may bring certain drawbacks, I believe that
this
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 is generally a positive development. It is true that consuming global
food
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 may give rise to several challenges. One commonly mentioned concern is that it could lead to
the
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 economic burden
of
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 the consumers because of their high prices, which might limit consumers’ abilities to purchase other expensive items.
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, in some situations,
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 may result in a phenomenon that they don’t have enough money to plan for a journey. Another major concern associated with
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 trend is that it will increase the pressure
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 native companies, particularly in cases where some specific commodities are much more famous in external brands.
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, some Chinese families prefer
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imported milk powder for their
new born
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 babies, which indicates the trend is popular among ordinary people. Despite these concerns, I would argue that the
overall
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 impact of buying global
food
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 is highly beneficial to modern society. One major
advantages
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 is that it reflects convenience for consumers, which is becoming increasingly important in today’s dynamic world. It
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 creates opportunities for individuals to choose the
food
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 they really want, which can result in the increasing happiness of their life.
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, many of my friends who have often chosen to go to Sam’s
club
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 have experienced great satisfaction when they
eating
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 their
favorite
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 imported snacks, highlighting its practical benefits in everyday life.
Moreover
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,
this
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 development can stimulate economic progress, leading to a thriving international market.
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, there are more and more companies expanding their sizes and trade targets during these years globally. As long as the transition is managed responsibly, the positive outcomes are likely to outweigh the negatives in the long term. In conclusion,
although
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 consumers’
behavior
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 of buying global
food
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 in
supermarket
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supermarkets
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 has downsides in certain cases, I
believed
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 that it is a positive shift for society as it
bring
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 substantial advantages.

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task achievement
Try to make your points clearer and support them with more specific examples.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more effectively to connect your ideas in a smoother way.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure to use varied vocabulary and check for grammatical errors to improve clarity.
task achievement
You presented a clear opinion about the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion clearly summarizes your main points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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