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The chart below shoes whole frequently people in the US are ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shoes whole frequently people in the US are ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
percentage
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 of American
people
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 who consistently consumed fast
food
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 at restaurants during a special period of time. (2003-2013). The data had been categorized into 6 parts (every day, several
times
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 a
week
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, once a
week
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, once or twice a month, a few
times
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 a year and never).
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, the largest number of
people
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 ate fast
food
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 once a
week
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.
However
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, a small
percentage
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 of
people
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 were eating unhealthy
food
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 every day. It is worth noting that a few populations have never eaten at fast
food
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 restaurants.
According to
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 the chart, a vast number of individuals were eating fast
food
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 on a weekly basis. (at just over 30% in 2003, nearly 35% in 2006 ,and just under 30% in 2013). Followed by the second
percentage
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 who went to consuming unhealthy
food
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 once or twice a month at 30% in 2003, 25% in 2006, and just under 30% in 2013.
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, they almost were in the same range. The chart shows that a small figure of individuals never ate fast
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 in
this
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 period of time at 5%, just under 5% and nearly 5%.
Similarly
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, the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who were eating in restaurants was in a low range at just under 5%.
Additionally
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, the proportion of eating fast
food
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 several
times
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 a
week
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 is larger than the figure for
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 a few
times
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 a year, respectively, at just under 20% and just under 15%

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, food, times, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • frequently
  • illustrates
  • percentage
  • individuals
  • consumer behavior
  • visits
  • decline
  • demographic
  • dining options
  • trend
  • increase
  • stable
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