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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts compare the marital status of the populations of
Australia
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 in 1999 and
Canada
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 in 2000.
Overall
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, marriage was the most common status in both countries, accounting for over one-third of the
population
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,
while
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 widowed and divorced individuals made up smaller proportions. Notably,
Australia
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 had a higher percentage of married people compared to
Canada
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,
whereas
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Canada
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 had a larger proportion of single individuals. In
Australia
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, the majority of the
population
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 (55%) was married, followed by 29% who were single. Divorced and widowed people accounted for equal proportions at 7% each. A small percentage (1%) were in same-sex marriages,
while
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 1% were separated but not divorced. In
Canada
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, 41% of the
population
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 was legally married, significantly lower than in
Australia
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.
However
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, a larger share (46%) was single. Divorced individuals made up 6%,
while
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 widowed people represented only 5%. Those separated but legally married accounted for 2% of the
population
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, canada, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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