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Topic – Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers, while others believe that students’ attitude are important. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, many people believe that good teachers play a
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crucial
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 every educational
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, opponents think that learner attitude is necessary to get a
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 will discuss both views in
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 with, a good
teacher
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 knows their
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 learning power and
interest
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. To extend it more, Every
student
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 has different capabilities from others. And, if a
teacher
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 has
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interest
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to know
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 about their
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 he/she can help
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student
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students
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 by teaching them in a different way. Some learners
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 low cathing power, and mostly they need help.
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, in some cases teachers ignore them. A good
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 always
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 about weak
students
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, they suggest different
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 materials and try to create their
interest
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study
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, so that they can go on the way to
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, some
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thier
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their
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interest
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. To explain it, Some
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 like to spend
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their
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 precious time on other activities. They are weak in studies and good in other
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activities
 and when a
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a
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pressure
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study
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 they just
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 . And they just carry on their
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, some
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children
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 behave rudely behind
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,
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studend
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student
 attitude is more
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important
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. to explain it, some learners
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don't
 like to spend time on
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study
, because they have different
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. If a
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put
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a
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pressure on them they
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interest
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from
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 their studies very badly.
To conclude
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teacher
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 and
student
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 both plays
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equal
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behind
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success
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coherence and cohesion
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grammar
Ensure that your spelling is correct, as small errors can distract from the overall clarity of your essay.
task achievement
Make sure your paragraphs maintain clear central ideas, as this will strengthen the argumentation in your essay.
task achievement
You addressed both views and provided your opinion clearly at the end, which is a positive aspect of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an organized structure with distinct paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your ideas.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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