Scientific developments in farming always bring major benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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modern era of
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, advancement in
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has blessed everyone and farming is no exception.
Technology
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has played a vital role in raising the farming standards with cutting edge
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like tractors, seeds and other farming
tools
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which results in significantly improving the
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yield and reducing the labour cost and
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. In my opinion, I  agree that farming gains indispensable benefits from the new technologies.
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essay will discuss the various advantages of
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in the farming sector.
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, with the advancement in the farming
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such
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as tractors, it has now become easy for
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farmers to save their manual effort and cultivate their lands in less time and with more precision.
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results in saving the time of the farmers and
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bolster
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high
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growth which in turn  elevates the profits of the farmers.
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,
technology
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supported
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improving
the seeds quality
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the quality of the seeds
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it has now become possible to increase
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crop
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production and meet the demand of the proliferating population
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.
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, a recent study by WHO revealed that the
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yield rate
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to 78% from 40% in a couple of years because of
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cutting edge
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tools
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.
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, scientific developments help reduce the
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produced from the farms and provide many ways to recycle the
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that will help in saving the natural
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resources.
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of advanced biogas plants blessed us to use
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eco friendly
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 energy which results in reducing
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carbon
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and saving the environment from harmful chemicals. The latest machines helped us to make wood pallets from the
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of the crops,
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our dependency has reduced  significantly on coal and wood.
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,
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study from the Texas University
agriculture department
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Agriculture Department
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has revealed that
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farm
waste
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is now significantly reduced with the advancement of
technology
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in the farming industry. In conclusion, based on the above facts, I completely agree that
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has benefited the farming sector and supports us in meeting our growing demands.
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, it helped in saving our
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.

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task achievement
While your arguments are clear, try to include more balanced perspectives or acknowledge any potential downsides of technological advances in farming to strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence, and work on seamlessly linking your ideas to enhance the flow of the essay. Consider using more varied conjunctions.
task achievement
Your introduction effectively sets the stage for the discussion and clearly outlines your position on the topic.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples which effectively supported your main points and demonstrated the impact of technology on farming.
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