IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.

The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The table provides the amount of
citizen
Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
show examples
 from 5 different European countries who live in each other's area in the year 2011.
In
Change preposition
Overall
show examples
overall
Linking Words
, Germany documented
with
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the highest
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
show examples
 of
foreigner
Fix the agreement mistake
foreigners
show examples
 who decided to live there.
In contrast
Linking Words
, the
least
Correct word choice
lowest
show examples
 proportion of
foreigners'
Change noun form
foreigners
show examples
live
Replace the word
living
show examples
 in other
country
Fix the agreement mistake
countries
show examples
 is Polish. Regarding the proportion of people living in other countries in Europe, Germany leads with 1.198.000 foreigners,
where
Correct word choice
whereas
show examples
Polish's
Change noun form
Polish
show examples
 people took over half that amount. In
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
second
place
Add a comma
place,
show examples
 there is British
at
Change preposition
with
show examples
 1.037.000 foreign
citizen
Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
show examples
. In the meantime, the
last
Linking Words
 3 countries
who
Correct pronoun usage
that
show examples
 have the
least
Correct word choice
lowest
show examples
 percentage of people from abroad are Spanish, Italian, and Polish. Spanish at 861.000, followed by Italian at 196.000.
Lastly
Linking Words
, Polish
rank
Replace the word
ranked
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
last
Linking Words
 in 2011 at around 6.000.
On the contrary
Linking Words
,
this
Linking Words
 country
is
Verb problem
has
show examples
 the highest

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
▼
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: