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Some people believe that car free days are effective ways to reduce air pollution However, others argue that there are more effectives. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The
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Air
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air
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pollution
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 has been one of the major concerns in many
countries
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 and individuals are seeking various
ways
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 to improve
the
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air
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 quality. Some people believe that cars should be limited
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 others argue that there are other effective
ways
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 for us to practice. In my opinion, I think we should set multiple
ways
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 to protect our environment. On one hand, setting
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car free
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car-free
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days
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 can be effective in reducing
air
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pollution
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. In modern society, most families can afford
buying
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to buy
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 a
car
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, and some families even own more. With all the cars that
burns
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 fuels on the road, a significant amount of toxic chemicals are released
everyday
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, damaging the
air
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 quality. The
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car free
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car-free
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days
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 can limit the
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number
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 of vehicles on the roads per day,
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, less gas or other harmful substances are produced. In many
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,
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 as China,
have
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adpoted
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adopted
adapted
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method
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methods
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 a few years ago to protect the environment. A report completed by the Chinese government indicated that the
days
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 with
clear
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a clear
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 sky
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had
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 significantly
icreased
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increased
 since they started
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 rule.
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, advancing
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waste
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the waste
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 handling process for the factories is
also
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 another way to protect the quality of
air
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. Many factories of
the
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traditional industries still use outdated methods or protocols to deal with
wastes
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waste
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,
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 as burning.
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means
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 often releases NO2 or other VOC that threaten people's health.
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, many
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 aim at eliminating the old-fashioned through regulations and advancing technologies. In Japan, scientists created a new material that helps process
waste
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.
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, since 2010, the
waste
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 from the companies
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 no longer allowed to be simply burnt,
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, the workers are required to mix it with materials and
then
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 bury the mixture in the ground.
This
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 not only protects the
air
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,
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 but
also
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 gives other
countries
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 ideas to reduce
air
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pollution
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. In conclusion,
car
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 limit
days
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 and other
ways
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such
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 as upgrading
waste
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 process
method
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methods
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 can be effective in protecting the
air
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, and we need to
adpot
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adopt
adapt
 various
ways
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 to work on reducing
air
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pollution
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.

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task achievement
Enhance the clarity of your arguments by ensuring each point is fully explained and directly related to the thesis statement. Consider developing your ideas with more depth and elaboration.
coherence and cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices to improve the flow of your essay and connect your ideas more smoothly. This can help your essay read more naturally and logically.
task achievement
You provide relevant examples that illustrate your points effectively, particularly with the reference to China and Japan, which strengthen your arguments.
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