Many people think hosting international sporting events brings a lot of benefits to a country, while others believe that it has more disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your own idea
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language
Improve grammar and spelling, as there are several errors that distract from the message. For example, 'consider' should be 'considered,' 'esstainal' should be 'essential,' and 'Hostig' should be 'Hosting.'
coherence
Enhance the logical flow by clearly separating different viewpoints in distinct paragraphs. Each paragraph should ideally contain a single idea, and the discussion should alternate between the pros and cons effectively.
task achievement
Provide specific examples to support your claims. Mentioning benefits such as economic growth or increased tourism revenue, and disadvantages like infrastructure costs or security concerns, would strengthen your argument.
content
The essay introduces a relevant topic and expresses a clear opinion, which is a good starting point for discussion.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
I believe that, many health problems are caused not by eating meat. Our health and problems with it are related with environment and climate. Many disorders are caused by poluted environment and natural disorders.
It is common for a student to take a gap year in a foreign country or even work for a year prior to university. Whether a student should engage in travelling or working before embarking on a formal qualification has been a topic of debate for various years. Firstly the advantages of such activities will be discussed, followed by all the economic disadvantages one encounters in these endeavours.
I am writing this letter to inform you that I am very much interested to apply for the job which you posted last week in the local news paper. I work as a team leader in a reputed organization wich is more popular in this country since 2016.
Few individuals argue that authorithies should plant trees in free spaces in city junctions and town, where as others believe that space should be utilised for construction. I firmly disagree, that available space should not be used for constructing or developing anything. instead used for planing trees.
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