Many people think hosting international sporting events brings a lot of benefits to a country, while others believe that it has more disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your own idea
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language
Improve grammar and spelling, as there are several errors that distract from the message. For example, 'consider' should be 'considered,' 'esstainal' should be 'essential,' and 'Hostig' should be 'Hosting.'
coherence
Enhance the logical flow by clearly separating different viewpoints in distinct paragraphs. Each paragraph should ideally contain a single idea, and the discussion should alternate between the pros and cons effectively.
task achievement
Provide specific examples to support your claims. Mentioning benefits such as economic growth or increased tourism revenue, and disadvantages like infrastructure costs or security concerns, would strengthen your argument.
content
The essay introduces a relevant topic and expresses a clear opinion, which is a good starting point for discussion.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
My name is Parth Suhagiya, and I am the director of the Towing manufacturing company. I am writing about the all-day meeting my company organized last week in your hotel, and all my participants liked your hotel, and they said the rooms were excellent, as well as the service you provided was awesome.
It is argued that government expenditure on visual art is frivolous. Many believe that this money should be allocated towards public services instead. I am inclined to disagree with this statement and in this essay, we shall discuss the benefits of investing in the arts such as supporting social cohesion and bringing in more tourists.
Big cities are developed rapidly every day. Some people assume that big cities can have various effects on people and bad health is one of the examples. In this essay, I will explain various reasons why big cities can contribute to bad health.
Knowing how to differentiate between what's right and wrong is an important skill that should be implemented in life. Children must be taught about good manners and the philosophies of what is wrong and right in school too not only by their parents. I fully agree with the idea of teaching those ideas in school rather than by parents alone.
Should school uniforms be banned? People have long debated whether school uniforms are truly necessary. Many educational institutions require students to wear uniforms, and although some argue that this rule should be abolished, I believe that school uniforms are important and should not be banned.