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You have seen a job advertisement in some newspaper. Write a letter to your friend asking him to consider this job. Please say: - Where have you seen the ad? - What is the job description? - Why do you think, he is a suitable candidate for it?

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Dear Smith, Hope
this
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 letter finds you well. Yesterday
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 I was browsing the internet I came across a
job
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 advertisement for a sales coordinator at an Apple company. The description of the
job
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 is quite similar to what you are looking for. They need a 2-year experienced candidate for
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 and I remember that you have 3-year experience
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 a sales and IT co-ordinator. Because of your qualifications and experience, I think you should consider
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job
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 as you are looking to work in big companies for new career opportunities. One of my friends is working for
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 Apple company and I asked him about the environment and working conditions of the company and he gave me a positive response. I think you should apply for
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job
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 as
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 is a good opportunity for
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you. See you soon Jhon

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task achievement
Consider providing more details about the job and the company to enhance the task response.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure to proofread for minor grammatical errors, such as 'a Apple company' should be 'an Apple company'.
task achievement
The letter has a friendly tone, which is suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The structure is clear, with a greeting, body, and closing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • came across
  • widely-read
  • credibility
  • passionate about
  • considerable experience
  • qualifications
  • professional skills
  • personal attributes
  • ideal candidate
  • achievements
  • career growth
  • long-term career goals
  • meaningfully contribute
  • industry
  • rarity
  • capability
  • excel
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