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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 table illustrates key information about the police
money
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 in one region in
britain
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Britain
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,
domenstrating
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demonstrating
 the source where the financial supply of the police
is coming
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came
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 from in 2017 and 2018.
whereas
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 the pie chart
represent
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 how
this
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money
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 is distributed to different services.
overall
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, it is clear from the table that the total supply gained is about 304,7
million
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 from
variety
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 of sectors in 2017.
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 in 2018 it was about 318.6
million
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 main supplier was the National Government for the years, providing 175.5
million
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,
177.8
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and 177.8
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million
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 from the total budget in the two years respectively. In
term
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 of the
money
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 spending, the pie chart
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 that in 2017, 75% of the total was used for salaries of both officers and staff, with only 8% provided for
technology
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the technology
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 sector, and 17% for building, and transport. And in 2018, was nearly the same way of
money
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 distribution with little change
of
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in
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 the ratios, where the amount spent on technology went to
be
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14%, were salaries.
decressed
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decreased
 to 69%, and construction and transport to 17%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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